One of the key foundations to a great email is that it is coming directly from the heart of the gymnast. Having been a college coach, I read thousands of recruits' emails and always saw it as a red flag when I could tell that a parent wrote the email.
I would immediately doubt the level of interest from the athlete. College coaches need the facts about you as an athlete and person, but they are also reading between the lines to see if you have true passion for the sport and their specific team. Below are some of the key points you want to include in your initial email to coaches:
1. Your name
2. Year you graduate
3. Level you compete
4. GPA or test scores
5. Contact and club information
6. Website or YouTube link
7. Why you are interested in their university and team
8. Something personal in regard to your strengths
9. Typically no information below Level 9 is needed and often only Level 10
10. Be specific to the need of the school. If it is Ivy League, it will want test scores and GPA
11. If you are contacting top-20 teams, they will want scores or proof you match their level
12. If you are older and want to walk on, let them know this in the subject line
13. Always be professional and address them by their last name until they say differently
Remember college coaches scan most emails quickly, because they get so many each day. They have very full schedules, so be sure you are concise and to the point. Also, be aware college coaches cannot email you back until September 1 of your junior year, which is why I recommend listing your club coach's cell phone number. They are allowed to contact club coaches at anytime.
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